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Original: To begin with, in our era, all kinds of information and messages are booming everyday.
Revised: In our times, we are exposed to a great deal of information.
Original: Maybe in some urgent conditions, political leaders have to withhold information from the public to avoid the possible turbulence, but we can never say that is necessary, even if desirable.
Revised: Political leaders may sometimes have to withhold information from the public to avoid potential conflict, but this is never necessary, let alone desirable.
Original: In this era of democracy and the law becoming more and more complete, everyone realizes his own rights including the right to know the things that he is interested in or relative to.
Revised: In this modern era of democracy and established codes of law, everyone knows their rights, particularly when the subject bears immediate interest to them.考资网(www.kaozi.com)
Original: People who are far away from New York never heard the disaster happening there.
Revised: Or people can turn a blind eye to momentous events, such as the September 11th attacks, just because they happened a long way away.
Original: Even if you only withhold a little information, the absence of it will surely hurt your people, further your society sooner or later because any information must has a close relation to these people or those, and will affect them at last.
Revised: Withholding even the most meager scrap of information hurts people, because however small it is, it will eventually have an impact on them.
Original: Complete information could help us to judge the environment in which we are and change our action according to others’ action, then the market gets to its balance.
Revised: A perfect flow of information helps us to eval[1] [2] [3] [4] [5] 下一页 |
